Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, sport is the popular news where make the people too interesting about it, consequently most of people todays tend to becoming a professional in sport. Some people believe it while other said that it is unfair.
On the one hand, the people in the whole the world most love the sport, while encourage them to live healthy, also give several pressure because become it their hobby. For example, the people who has a role model is a professional of sport tend to following their style, even make it their ambition to be similar them. However, when they fell that it is too satisfying to do that they will learn it deeply and struggle to reach this occupation. As result, to get more much money, this opportunities really helpful when the people become a professional sport. In conclusion, it is exactly to people have desire can earn a great deal more money and have a hobby in sport.
On the other hand, the felling of people about the sport is presented a tendency to become such them as well as reach a successful of this occasion. There are several reasons the people think that it is unfair. The first, the people who did in sport always got a big support from communities even from government with evidence is provided many counselor as much as kids of modern products. Secondly, the government is subsidizing them to encourage them in sport with expensive cost. In addition, the amount of the salary to them is the bigger while the contribution of the sport for country just around existence.
To sum up, the main problem of this case is about unfair. I agree that an athlete is better about salary than the other profession, nevertheless it is depend on the level of capable in every people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... too interesting about it, consequently most of people todays tend to becoming a professional ...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun pressure seems to be countable; consider using: 'several pressures'.
Suggestion: several pressures
...courage them to live healthy, also give several pressure because become it their hobby. For exam...
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Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...r them. However, when they fell that it is too satisfying to do that they will learn it deeply an...
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Line 3, column 481, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ion. As result, to get more much money, this opportunities really helpful when the p...
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Line 5, column 340, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun counselor seems to be countable; consider using: 'many counselors'.
Suggestion: many counselors
...om government with evidence is provided many counselor as much as kids of modern products. Sec...
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Line 7, column 152, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...he other profession, nevertheless it is depend on the level of capable in every people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67880794702 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56418205359 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516556291391 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2821426948 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.928571429 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7857142857 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330862382047 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123096522459 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828936836212 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193284523107 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551925498927 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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