Write a letter to a college Principal, where you attended a one day computer course and are unhappy about the way it was conducted. Explain what was the type of the course, what happened and what can be done to make sure this problem never occurs again.

Essay topics:

Write a letter to a college Principal, where you attended a one day computer course and are unhappy about the way it was conducted. Explain what was the type of the course, what happened and what can be done to make sure this problem never occurs again.

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to inform you that the computer course which was held last week was not useful. The course was going to provide some principal information about working online. Unfortunately, I could not get benefits of this course because of some pressing matter.

Let me explain in more detail. Although the supervisor was so professional, lack of the internet connection led to we could not acquire the information. Since it was really demanding for him to explain the minutiae. Furthermore, a number of participants were more than the capacity of class, so that there were not enough systems. Therefore, some individuals, like me, could not see the screen. As a result, there was chaos in the class which distracted both teacher and learner.

I would like to suggest that if it is possible the systems should be increased or the limited members should be registered. Moreover, it should be better to buy internet from reliable service due to connecting the internet conveniently.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours faithfully,

Parya Amini

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 238, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o connecting the internet conveniently. Thank you for your consideration. You...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 911.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 174.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23563218391 4.54256449028 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96115356575 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.66091954023 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 290.88556701 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.089979534 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.0769230769 76.5299724578 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3846153846 16.8248392259 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69230769231 4.34317383033 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160939051767 0.216113520407 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511860660748 0.0766984524023 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479697871764 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0860197491454 0.12726935374 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620272371197 0.0580467560999 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 70.7449484536 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.52 8.71597938144 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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