Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details:-Why do you want to collect money for the charity organization (the church has a campaign to give 5000 handbook

Essay topics:

Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details:
-Why do you want to collect money for the charity organization (the church has a campaign to give 5000 handbooks to poor children in district 7)
-Ask for your friend to help ( can you help?)
-Explain in detail how your friend can help

Submitted by drtruong92 on Thu, 06/06/2019 - 07:15

Dear Tom,

I was wondering if you'd want to give some money for the charity campaign of the church at the beginning of next month.

you know, our local church has decided to give 5000 handbooks to poor children in district 5. I want to support the church on this campaign by just donating 2 million Vietnam dongs so the organizers can use to order books with the same cover. However, I can only give 1 million dongs at the moment and I need 1 million more.

so, it'd be really nice if you could help me with this amount of money that I'm in short. I'll make sure that the church acknowledges your contribution. And don't worry! Any kind of help is meaningful to both the organizer and the poor children.

The church will accept donation until the end of this month so there's plenty of time. you could transfer the money directly to my bank account or give me when I'm back from work in the evening. It's no rush so you could do it anytime that is convenient for you.

All the best,
Truong

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: you'd
Dear Tom, I was wondering if youd want to give some money for the charity...
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Suggestion: You
...urch at the beginning of next month. you know, our local church has decided to g...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: So
...he moment and I need 1 million more. so, itd be really nice if you could help m...
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Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... help me with this amount of money that Im in short. Ill make sure that the church...
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Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
... this amount of money that Im in short. Ill make sure that the church acknowledges ...
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Line 7, column 155, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...rch acknowledges your contribution. And dont worry! Any kind of help is meaningful t...
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Line 9, column 64, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...donation until the end of this month so theres plenty of time. you could transfer the ...
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Suggestion: You
...of this month so theres plenty of time. you could transfer the money directly to my...
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Suggestion: I'm
...ctly to my bank account or give me when Im back from work in the evening. Its no r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, so, in short, kind of, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 812.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.3422459893 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24509786231 2.54303337028 88% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4284336005 44.8134815571 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.8181818182 76.5299724578 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 4.34317383033 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260018737636 0.216113520407 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848144139602 0.0766984524023 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684386538554 0.0603063233224 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162733747186 0.12726935374 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664824091328 0.0580467560999 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 70.7449484536 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.6 8.71597938144 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 7.59969072165 89% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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