Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details.- why do you want to collect money for the charity organization?- Ask your friend to help- explain in detail ho

Essay topics:

Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details.
- why do you want to collect money for the charity organization?
- Ask your friend to help
- explain in detail how your friend can help.

Dear Samira,
As you know that I am involved in philanthropic work and keep on working on projects which helps people to come out of illness. This time I have taken the voluntary responsibility to collect funds for cancer patients. I am writing this letter to seek your help to collect money for cancer patients in United Kingdom.
Currently I am working for charity organization named ‘Prohuman’ which have offices in 19 countries especially in developing and under developing nations. Since I am studying in U.K, I choose the United Kingdom because I believe that my study would not be affected much.
Last week, I have started this campaign in London and provided training to members to members based out in London and near areas. We have also created computer based training which helps other members to understand whole program and how individual can help the patients in United kingdom. Though you are busy in study at university, I expect that you spread this campaign by email or word of mouth in your university.
Let me know if any queries. I am looking forward to getting help from you on this program.
With Regards,
Jama

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Samira, As you know that I am involved in philan...
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Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eveloping and under developing nations. Since I am studying in U.K, I choose the Unit...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: K
...oping nations. Since I am studying in U.K, I choose the United Kingdom because I ...
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Line 4, column 73, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'to members'.
Suggestion: to members
...ampaign in London and provided training to members to members based out in London and near areas. We ...
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Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... am looking forward to getting help from you on this program. With Regards, Jam...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 958.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 195.0 206.0 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91282051282 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83573514628 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2156663897 44.8134815571 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0909090909 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7272727273 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54545454545 4.34317383033 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186022730528 0.216113520407 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693365116233 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876855202404 0.0603063233224 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108697004502 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0807646747832 0.0580467560999 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 8.37731958763 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.