Write a letter to your friend and arrange a meeting for visiting his new born baby

Essay topics:

Write a letter to your friend and arrange a meeting for visiting his new born baby

Dear Mohammad

This is Aidin. I was informed the other day by the nurses that you had a new baby. I couldn’t be happier for you by any other news and I give you my greatest congratulations. I was hoping if i could visit the newborn Mr. Behmanesh so not only I would enjoy visiting him but I would give him a present for coming into this world.

What I’ve picked up for him is the “Me and my daddy stories “ series. I personally find these books very amusing and entreating. Also , he could enjoy these books, company of his dad, the superman in his life and the funny illustrations in the series.

I know that you work at the clinic everyday till night. I my self am busy every afternoon and since my IELTS exam is within a month, I study hard every night in order to obtain the needed score. I suggest an arrangement to visit the Behmanesh family at weekend If it is possible with you, too. If not, I could try to free some time in other days. Right now my most important task is paying a visit to my friend and his baby.

Kiss the baby on my behalf.
Your pal
A.Farughi

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...I give you my greatest congratulations. I was hoping if i could visit the newborn...
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Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...eatest congratulations. I was hoping if i could visit the newborn Mr. Behmanesh s...
^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... books very amusing and entreating. Also , he could enjoy these books, company of ...
^^
Line 7, column 196, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ht in order to obtain the needed score. I suggest an arrangement to visit the Beh...
^
Line 11, column 3, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Farughi
...iss the baby on my behalf. Your pal A.Farughi
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 32.9175257732 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 898.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 208.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.31730769231 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45296403909 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639423076923 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 281.7 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5717509012 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.1428571429 76.5299724578 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8571428571 16.8248392259 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.21428571429 4.34317383033 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162658009017 0.216113520407 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049327259882 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435928882096 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0841020734038 0.12726935374 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0105318175021 0.0580467560999 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 8.37731958763 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.18 8.71597938144 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 7.59969072165 92% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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