Write a letter to your manager explaining how to improve the productivity in the company you work for. You should:Describe the current condition of the companyRequest for changes that you think will improve the situationPersuade why its a good investment

Essay topics:

Write a letter to your manager explaining how to improve the productivity in the company you work for. You should:

Describe the current condition of the company

Request for changes that you think will improve the situation

Persuade why its a good investment to make.

Dear Sir,

I am studying an English course at your institution in New york. I am writing this letter in regards to a misunderstanding with the center address and accommodation provided.

I have started my course in Street 11 Avenue; however, my residential address is almost 50 km away from my coaching center. I believe, there is an issue occurred with the coaching address, as there is another coaching center with the same name near to my accommodation. I assume you have chosen a different coaching center while providing my house.

I was told that I would get the nearest place to a coaching center so that I can save my travel time and use it to study more efficiently. Also, I had requested a single room, yet I have been provided with twin sharing basis room.

this accommodation is affecting my studies as I am not able to attend a coaching center on time due to a long travel journey. I would appreciate if you could take my request urgently and help me to provide the accommodation on the given request.

Yours faithfully,

Aman

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am studying an English course at your ...
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Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...n in New york. I am writing this letter in regards to a misunderstanding with the center addr...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...dress and accommodation provided. I have started my course in Street 11 Ave...
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Line 9, column 125, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ost 50 km away from my coaching center. I believe, there is an issue occurred wit...
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Line 9, column 271, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the same name near to my accommodation. I assume you have chosen a different coac...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... center while providing my house. I was told that I would get the nearest p...
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Suggestion: This
...ded with twin sharing basis room. this accommodation is affecting my studies a...
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Line 21, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e given request. Yours faithfully, Aman
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, while, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 885.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 185.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78378378378 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92498868409 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 127.690721649 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616216216216 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 290.88556701 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9795526751 44.8134815571 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 16.8248392259 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 4.34317383033 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0495135388949 0.216113520407 23% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272797801533 0.0766984524023 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302380023053 0.0603063233224 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0311849123186 0.12726935374 25% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020291739621 0.0580467560999 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 8.71597938144 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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