Write a letter to your manager explaining how to improve the productivity in the company you work for. You should:Describe the current condition of the companyRequest for changes that you think will improve the situationPersuade why its a good investment

Essay topics:

Write a letter to your manager explaining how to improve the productivity in the company you work for. You should:
Describe the current condition of the company
Request for changes that you think will improve the situation
Persuade why its a good investment to make.

Dear Sir,

With all due respect, I would like to inform you about the current condition of the different equipment in our manufacturing plant of our company, Honda Limited. The situation is quite dreadful and the efficiency of the equipment is well below expected. Furthermore, the current staff are not trained to handle the materials and facilities. As a result, the maintenance cost if adversely affecting our profits.

I have a few recommendations to make and I hope you will take this into consideration within the next few months. First of all, most of our mechanics and electricians need to be trained to use the latest equipment. Furthermore, some of the old equipment is consuming too much energy and releasing excessive amounts of pollutants. Hence, they should be replaced immediately. Last but not least, the logistics and supply of different materials is not well managed. If an experienced personnel is put in charge, then we can cut down costs and increase profits.

I think that the suggested areas are good improvements and the return on investment will be high since it is likely that these will result in increased concentration of the staff due to more utilization of the resources as well as optimization of the production process. Please let me know if you need detailed outline of the different upgrades. I am happy to assist you in any matter regarding this.

Sincerely Yours.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... use the latest equipment. Furthermore, some of the old equipment is consuming too much ene...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, regarding, so, then, well, i think, as a result, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.85567010309 337% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1179.0 937.175257732 126% => OK
No of words: 234.0 206.0 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03846153846 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04579758006 2.54303337028 120% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 127.690721649 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628205128205 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 366.3 290.88556701 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3067088472 44.8134815571 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6923076923 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 4.34317383033 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158666204326 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403974488841 0.0766984524023 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473902194285 0.0603063233224 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109312448112 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649621515399 0.0580467560999 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 8.37731958763 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 41.2886597938 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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