You are a foreign student You want to join a club for society so that you can enjoy your team when you study there Right to the student union manager In your letter introduce yourself write about your hobbies and interest asked for information about clubs

Essay topics:

You are a foreign student. You want to join a club for society so that you can enjoy your team when you study there.

Right to the student union manager. In your letter
-introduce yourself
-write about your hobbies and interest
-asked for information about clubs and societies

Dear Sir

I am an overseas student from India who is doing masters in information technology at the University of London. I started my study here in the January intake. The purpose of mine to penning down this epistle is to request you to send me the information about clubs or society in which I intend to enroll in.

As I am from India and I do not come here before it due to this. I'm a novice to this place and not much aware about surrounding ambience because this reason, I want to join the clubs which can help me to familiarize with other persons. Moreover, I am very good in some sports such as cricket and basketball. Evenly in the school time, I was the captain of basketball team and participated in many of the domestic tournaments. In addition, I am very keen to know about the cultures of different countries and it gives me a chance to interact with people from varying backgrounds.

it would be very applicable if you send me all information regarding the clubs and societies such as terms and conditions, enrolment charges and their contact number.I am eager to know and to join some of the clubs so that I am stay connected with my hobbies and with people of this country and from other nations as well.

I am look forward to hearing from you.

Thanking you

Yours faithfully 10 February 2018

Shiwani

Votes
Average: 9.2 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...you. Thanking you Yours faithfully 10 February 2018 Shiwani
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, regarding, so, well, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 5.05154639175 238% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 26.3917525773 167% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1100.0 937.175257732 117% => OK
No of words: 241.0 206.0 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5643153527 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63679805491 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572614107884 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 338.4 290.88556701 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.320334043 44.8134815571 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 76.5299724578 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 16.8248392259 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 4.34317383033 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200481204503 0.216113520407 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737168222205 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637102940716 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112277187553 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320183074295 0.0580467560999 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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