You are accepted as an overseas student by a university. You want some information for you to go to university.Write to a student officer in your letter.Ask him/her about the accommodation.The transportation Facilities.The class schedule

Essay topics:

You are accepted as an overseas student by a university. You want some information for you to go to university.
Write to a student officer in your letter

.Ask him/her about the accommodation
.The transportation Facilities
.The class schedule

Dear Sir

I recently take admission in your esteemed University for the MBA course which commencing this September. The purpose of mine to penning down epistol is to you to seek the information about living facility, transport and class schedules etcetera before coming to Australia.

As I am the native dweller of India and before it, I could not come Australia due to this I will novice to the ambience of Australia. Hence, I would like to know about the accommodation facilities which are given by you to an overseas students whether the university offers halls of residence or students have to find flats themselves? Apart from this, if student is living in a flat of a nearby society then what transportation facilities available there. I have tried to find out on the Internet but all my efforts are gone to vain because I could not get the proper data from it.

Moreover I could also like to know about the class schedules properly that when the classes would ushered in so that I will come there before you embarked the session.

I would be very grateful if you give the details of these things as early as possible so that in future I would not face the major hurdles during my study and able to combat with them to ward off myself from critical situations.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully
8th February 2018
Aman

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schedules'' or 'schedule's'?
Suggestion: schedules'; schedule's
...ut living facility, transport and class schedules etcetera before coming to Australia. ...
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Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... dweller of India and before it, I could not come Australia due to this I will no...
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Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... facilities which are given by you to an overseas students whether the university...
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Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'student'?
Suggestion: student
... which are given by you to an overseas students whether the university offers halls of ...
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Line 5, column 406, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is living in a flat of a nearby society then what transportation facilities avai...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...uld not get the proper data from it. Moreover I could also like to know about the cla...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 99, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'usher'
Suggestion: usher
...es properly that when the classes would ushered in so that I will come there before you...
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Line 14, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... hearing from you. Yours faithfully 8th February 2018 Aman ...
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Line 15, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... 8th February 2018 Aman
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, moreover, so, then, well, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 26.3917525773 167% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1128.0 937.175257732 120% => OK
No of words: 239.0 206.0 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71966527197 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58029100052 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623430962343 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 356.4 290.88556701 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.2146596344 44.8134815571 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.8 76.5299724578 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9 16.8248392259 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 4.34317383033 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21003384835 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805859390095 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660221571767 0.0603063233224 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0838497389575 0.12726935374 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631215574652 0.0580467560999 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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