Essay topics: You live in a room in college with you share with another student. However,, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.Write a letter to accommodation officer at the college. In the letter -describe

Essay topics:

Essay topics: You live in a room in college with you share with another student. However,, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.

Write a letter to accommodation officer at the college. In the letter

-describe the situation
Explain your problem and why is difficult to work
-say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir,

My name is Shivani. I live in your college accommodation and I am writing in regards to some problems which I have been facing recently that you have made it difficult for me to concentrate my work.

I am in my second year now and currently share my room with a person who is in fourth year. While, I understand that sharing a room is required for all residents in this accommodation, my roommate has been making it very difficult for me to study.

The problem is that he often invites people over for parties without telling me in advance. This was true even last week during the exam period. I have tried to consel with him but all things are gone to vain.

I am hoping that you will be able to place me in a quiter room for the next semester. I apologise for the trouble, but I need to be able to study in my residence.

Thank you very much for your help.

Yours faithfully,

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
... college accommodation and I am writing in regards to some problems which I have been facing ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 87, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...in a quiter room for the next semester. I apologise for the trouble, but I need t...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 737.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.33529411765 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48121663427 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605882352941 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 231.3 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6146723689 44.8134815571 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.7 76.5299724578 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 4.34317383033 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189150988377 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063836815583 0.0766984524023 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540570177904 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107921010263 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329865132571 0.0580467560999 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.6 8.71597938144 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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