You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- Give details of your study plans
- Explain why you want to get a part-time job
- Suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Mahsa,
I hope this letter finds you perfect. It’s been a long time that we’ve not met each other. As you were aware of my application for UBC university, I've received my admission email from them includes that I’m accepted in Computer Science and I must start it from 25th August. It means I have to leave my country about next 4 weeks. I’m totally thrilled to meet you again and a bit anxious of expenditures. While i’m getting ready for moving there, actually I was wondering to do a half-part job coincide my studying because you’re quite aware of the high cost of living there.
Furthermore, my father couldn’t loan me the money he had promised. But honestly, I don’t have any trustful and comprehensive information whole the recruitment. i’m going to send you my résumé and my references. Please take a look and send me your feedback. i’m really glad if you could suggest some advice to make my resume more influence and accurate. Your help in this matter is really mean to me. I hope to see you as soon as possible
Lots of love,
Chi
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mahsa, I hope this letter finds you perfect. It...
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Suggestion: I've
...e of my application for UBC university, Ive received my admission email from them i...
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Suggestion: I&apos
...sive information whole the recruitment. i'm going to send you my résumé and my re...
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Suggestion: I&apos
... take a look and send me your feedback. i'm really glad if you could suggest some...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... possible Lots of love, Chi
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, honestly, if, look, really, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 932.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90526315789 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79505400123 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.705263157895 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 282.6 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9503341965 44.8134815571 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6923076923 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6153846154 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 4.34317383033 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0427978248025 0.216113520407 20% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.022171848631 0.0766984524023 29% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339009267332 0.0603063233224 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0370320733869 0.12726935374 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178506592205 0.0580467560999 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.