You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- Give details of your study plans
- Explain why you want to get a part-time job
- Suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Hi Mayank,
I hope this mail finds you good !
First of all I want to give you an awesome news that I have gotten through ABC college entrance examination in your beautiful city XYZ and joining it from 1st January.
Also I am glad to inform that I am selected for my favourite subject which is computer science and course duration is 3 years.
Since I am getting 50% scholarship on my tuition fee but even though I need to earn some money to cover rest of the fee and for that I need your help
Friend, As per our last conversation you told me about some part-time job offers in your organisation which I can do after my college time so if you help me to grab that opportunity to work with you , I would be grateful to you
Any part-time job for 4 hours every evening would be helpful for me to cover my expenses and it will help me to grow as a professional as well.
I am landing on 22nd December. after landing I will be calling you and then we can meet and discuss further
Thanks in advance !
Your Buddy,
Zia
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 33, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'awesome news'.
Suggestion: awesome news
... ! First of all I want to give you an awesome news that I have gotten through ABC college ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...XYZ and joining it from 1st January. Also I am glad to inform that I am selected ...
^^^^
Line 17, column 199, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...o grab that opportunity to work with you , I would be grateful to you Any part-t...
^^
Line 21, column 32, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
... well. I am landing on 22nd December. after landing I will be calling you and then ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 852.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 196.0 206.0 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34693877551 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42100518992 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637755102041 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 12.6804123711 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 16.3608247423 238% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 172.30600686 44.8134815571 384% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.4 76.5299724578 223% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 39.2 16.8248392259 233% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.0 4.34317383033 253% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32921060631 0.216113520407 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124553123175 0.0766984524023 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11483523386 0.0603063233224 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135670582864 0.12726935374 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108242121015 0.0580467560999 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 8.37731958763 223% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 7.45979381443 201% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 8.62886597938 197% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 8.54432989691 206% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.