You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your lettergive details of your study plansexplain why you | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

<span style="font-family: "Segoe UI Emoji", sans-serif; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial;">Dear James,<o:p></o:p><span style="font-family: "Segoe UI Emoji", sans-serif; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial;">Hope you are in the pink of your health. I am writing this letter to inform you that I have joined the University of the Netherlands and I am coming to your city. Let me explain you in detail.<o:p></o:p><span style="font-family: "Segoe UI Emoji", sans-serif; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial;">I had applied for a few universities for my Masters Programs and out of which I have received a response from the stated university. This is a two-year program with extensive practical work and a project with some reputed MNC and the University will provide placement at the end of the course. Also, the university is providing me with full-time scholarship and accommodation as well. However, I would like to take up a part-time job owing to the reason that I do not want to burden up my parents with extra expenses
since they have to take care of my little siblings and grandparents also. I want to help them financially and will soon be taking up their responsibilities. Therefore, I want your support for the same.<o:p></o:p><span style="font-family: "Segoe UI Emoji", sans-serif; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial;">I would require your help to find me a part-time job as you are aware of the city and you must be having friends who can refer me to get a job.
Looking forward to your response.<o:p></o:p><span style="font-family: "Segoe UI Emoji", sans-serif; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial;">Best regards,<o:p></o:p><span style="font-family: "Segoe UI Emoji", sans-serif; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial;">Ben<o:p></o:p>

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...ckground-clip: initial;'>Dear James,

^^
Line 2, column 69, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... of my little siblings and grandparents also. I want to help them financially and wi...
^^^^
Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...ground-clip: initial;'>Best regards,

^^
Line 3, column 808, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , sans-serif&apos
...s;font-family:"Segoe UI Emoji",sans-serif'>

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, so, therefore, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 3.85567010309 363% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3126.0 937.175257732 334% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 332.0 206.0 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 9.4156626506 4.54256449028 207% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 3.78020617076 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 9.21227541327 2.54303337028 362% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 145.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436746987952 0.622605031667 70% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 833.4 290.88556701 287% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.5 1.41237113402 177% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 16.3608247423 220% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 262.328038913 44.8134815571 585% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 347.333333333 76.5299724578 454% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 36.8888888889 16.8248392259 219% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 4.34317383033 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0649608984367 0.216113520407 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499113195174 0.0766984524023 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405823704299 0.0603063233224 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690378759839 0.12726935374 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518208258936 0.0580467560999 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 41.4 8.37731958763 494% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -41.2 70.7449484536 -58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 3.82989690722 504% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.9 7.45979381443 374% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 37.95 8.71597938144 435% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 41.2886597938 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 8.62886597938 319% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.4 8.54432989691 192% => OK
text_standard: 28.0 8.15463917526 343% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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