You are going on a short training course at a collage in Greenmount Northern Ireland You need somewhere to live while you are there Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college In your letter explain your situation describe the accommodation

Essay topics:

You are going on a short training course at a collage in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter,

explain your situation
describe the accommodation you require
say when you will need it

Dear Ms. Rose,

I am writing to inform you that I am looking for an accommodation in Greenmount, Northern Ireland.

My name is Paul Smith, a professional working with Unilever. My company has offered me to do a short training course of 3 months in Greenmount, Ireland for which I will be travelling next week. Due to time pressure and work load, it is very difficult to find an accommodation near college. Moreover, language barrier is a major issue, as I cannot communicate in the local language. I would like to request you to help me find me an accommodation near to my college.

I am very adjustable when it comes to stay as my job demands too much travelling across the country. I am looking for a fully furnished one bedroom apartment with balcony preferred near the college. My company has given me a budget of $1500 for the accommodation. Also, a small request, if its possible to get an apartment off the main road.

I will be landing on 14th July at 9 am and I will be staying with my cousin over the weekend. I need my own place to stay from 16th July to 15th October. I will reach the accommodation office to collect the keys of my accommodation on Monday, 16th July at 8 am and complete the formalities.

Thanking you.

Yours faithfully,

Paul Smith

Votes
Average: 7.4 (13 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
...ing to inform you that I am looking for an accommodation in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. My ...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
...work load, it is very difficult to find an accommodation near college. Moreover, language barrie...
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Line 5, column 430, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
... like to request you to help me find me an accommodation near to my college. I am very adjust...
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Line 7, column 66, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... it comes to stay as my job demands too much travelling across the country. I am loo...
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Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...too much travelling across the country. I am looking for a fully furnished one be...
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Line 9, column 155, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...to stay from 16th July to 15th October. I will reach the accommodation office to ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1056.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 230.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59130434783 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9303315683 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582608695652 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 319.5 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9423739278 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.4285714286 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.94845360825 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167299898309 0.216113520407 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607969906669 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631799842518 0.0603063233224 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976355152092 0.12726935374 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605346109646 0.0580467560999 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 8.37731958763 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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