You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency.In your letterintroduce yourselfexplain what sort of job you would likeand say what experience and skills you have

Essay topics:

You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency.
In your letter

introduce yourself
explain what sort of job you would like
and say what experience and skills you have

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am a German national from Heidelberg and at present I am studying for a Master’s degree in Commercial Law here, at the University of Bielefeld, where I have been for the last two months.

I am looking for a part-time job and I wonder if you can help me. Probably, I
would like an office job, perhaps working as a secretary, office administrator or typist. I can only work during the afternoons and at weekends as my university studies occupy most of the day. I would be ready to start immediately.

I am a competent typist and I am computer-literate. In addition, I speak Polish and German fluently and I have been learning English for the past three years. While I studied for my degree, I worked as a part-time office manager for an import-export firm in Heidelberg. In recent years, I have also had temporary summer jobs as a hotel receptionist in Mannheim, Germany.

I am looking forward to hearing from you,

Yours faithfully,
Heinrich Bukowski

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ould be ready to start immediately. I am a competent typist and I am computer...
^
Line 10, column 42, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... am looking forward to hearing from you, Yours faithfully, Heinrich Bukowski
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 825.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85294117647 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18239643332 2.54303337028 125% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 127.690721649 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617647058824 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 257.4 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1437703343 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 4.34317383033 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214592745963 0.216113520407 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875482717431 0.0766984524023 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846333289822 0.0603063233224 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138208857729 0.12726935374 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823442972909 0.0580467560999 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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