You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Monday and Wednesday evenings to practice in the community hall. You have been told, however, that is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.
Write a letter to the manager in the letter.
Describe what the group does
Explain why the group is good for the community
Suggest alternative days and times for practice.
Dear Mr Smith,
Greetings for the day!
Through this letter, I want to ask you to allow us to continue the use of the community hall for our evening music group practice.
Please allow me to elaborate on this matter. Since you have never met our band group, so might have millions of question running through into your mind about our music group such as what type of group is this, and what they do in our community hall?. So, first, I want to introduce my band group. In this group, we are seven members, and all are want to become professional in playing drums, flute and piano. Secondly, we have no other place to practice with our musical equipment to fulfil our dreams.
However, a verbal message sends by you that we are not carried on our practice on Monday and Wednesday from next month. Even though, all the band members are participating in a charity program which was organized by your community centre every month since 2016. Further, we give all the money to in favour of this centre.
If you allow me I want to give some suggestion to change our practice timings. Not only we continue our practice, but also your community benefited by the money that we denote through a charity program. This hall closed<span class="hiddenGrammarError" pre="hall "></span> for Sunday and Saturday evenings since last year and we all are ready to switch practice time on these days.
Looking forward to your prompt response.
Yours faithfully,
Amanpreet Kaur.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 32.9175257732 131% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 26.3917525773 152% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1249.0 937.175257732 133% => OK
No of words: 255.0 206.0 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89803921569 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17648511253 2.54303337028 125% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 373.5 290.88556701 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3759415086 44.8134815571 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2142857143 76.5299724578 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2142857143 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 4.34317383033 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227313285927 0.216113520407 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701148728472 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764964815912 0.0603063233224 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120793293146 0.12726935374 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973751279851 0.0580467560999 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 8.37731958763 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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