You are a university student living in on-campus accommodation. You are having someproblems with the internet connection in your room.Write to the supervisor of your residence. In your letter Introduce yourself Inform him / her of the si

Essay topics:

You are a university student living in on-campus accommodation. You are having some
problems with the internet connection in your room.
Write to the supervisor of your residence. In your letter
 Introduce yourself
 Inform him / her of the situation
 Request that the problem be fixed

Dear sir/madam,
I am writing to bring to your attention some problems that I have with the dormitory internet connection.

My name is Rahi Honarvar and I am the student of computer and science faculty. I live in the dormitory accomodation and my room number is 10. As you may know we are in the middle of final exams and all the students have lots of researches and assignments to do.

Unfortunately, during the past 2 weeks we had problem with the wifi connection, it is disconnected almost half of the day and it makes the situation difficult for us to surf the net or contact with the tuitor via Email.

I would be extremely grateful if you could provide a better internet connection for the on-campus accomodation residents. This will help the students to meet the projects' deadline and be successful in their final exams.

I am looking forward to your immidiate response.

Yours sincerely,
Rahi Honarvar

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 163, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'projects'' or 'project's'?
Suggestion: projects'; project's
...This will help the students to meet the projects deadline and be successful in their fin...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 772.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 158.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88607594937 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9054148873 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.651898734177 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 236.7 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5441613206 44.8134815571 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7777777778 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5555555556 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88888888889 4.34317383033 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239555691428 0.216113520407 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915343606995 0.0766984524023 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496161351652 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112396098481 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466848376527 0.0580467560999 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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