You are a university student living in on campus accommodation You are having some problems with the internet connection in your room Write to a supervisor of your residence In your letter introduce yourself inform him her of the situation request that th

Essay topics:

You are a university student living in on-campus accommodation. You are having some problems with the internet connection in your room. Write to a supervisor of your residence. In your letter: introduce yourself; inform him/her of the situation; request that the problem be fixed.

Dear Madam,
I, Baniz, am a resident of campus, on the fourth floor. While I have found most of the facilities acceptable, thus far I am writing to complain about the problem of the internet connection in my room. Although I had been told that there is an internet access in the rooms, when I received here, the access was not practical. So, I checked my devices and tried to connect through lobby modem, which was a successful one. Applying the same username and password, however, the connection was impossible in my own room. As we, the international students need to use the internet to connect our beloved family and friends, to save compensations, it is essential for me to connect it. Furthermore, to research on my dissertation subject and even search for papers and books, which will be influential in my research, it is necessary for me to access the internet. I would, however, appreciate it if both the modem and connection would be checked and the problem would be solved soon.
Yours Faithfully,
Baniz

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... solved soon. Yours Faithfully, Baniz
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 846.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 176.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80681818182 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86829977426 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619318181818 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 254.7 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.145307236 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 4.34317383033 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.29896907216 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149124695273 0.216113520407 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671659277554 0.0766984524023 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508692585673 0.0603063233224 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121689336406 0.12726935374 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0580467560999 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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