You go to a gym to carry out exercise everyday. One day , you have forgotten your bag in the gym and the gym management has announced that they wold keep the gym closed for a week for some renovation work. You need your bag as it has some important things

Essay topics:

You go to a gym to carry out exercise everyday. One day , you have forgotten your bag in the gym and the gym management has announced that they wold keep the gym closed for a week for some renovation work. You need your bag as it has some important things in it.
Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In you letter
Introduce yourself and describe your problem.
give a description of your bag.
Tell them what you want them to do.

Hello Mr XYZ,
I am writing this letter to seek your support in getting my bag which I had forgotten yesterday evening when I visited for my regular fitness hour.

Last day around 7Pm I had finished treadmill and took shower. Since it started raining all of a sudden so I returned home with one of my neighbor and forgot the bag at locker section, in hurry. I carried a red color cylindrical shape bag with blue pockets at both sides. it not only contain the usual towel and dress but also a crucial official document that I need to submit in office by tomorrow. today while searching the document I realized the bag is still in the gymnasium locker and your assistance is required to get it as I got a message from the fitness center administration stating closure of the gym from today due to renovation work.

will it be possible for you to let me into gym and take my bag out? I request you to please have a word with the management and abreast them about the issue. I hope they will understand the situation and allow for their valuable customer. I must have the manuscripts by tomorrow or else it will be a crisis.

Yours Sincerely
Arun Kumar

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...I need to submit in office by tomorrow. today while searching the document I realized...
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... from today due to renovation work. will it be possible for you to let me into g...
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... and allow for their valuable customer. I must have the manuscripts by tomorrow o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 948.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 213.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45070422535 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50628604234 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657276995305 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2940678552 44.8134815571 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1818181818 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3636363636 16.8248392259 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.45454545455 4.34317383033 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277709409034 0.216113520407 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840015234808 0.0766984524023 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709875548572 0.0603063233224 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158402063963 0.12726935374 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551744095375 0.0580467560999 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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