You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country.Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter• describe a news story in your country• explain why people are inter

Dear John,

How have you been? It's been too long since we were last in touch. I hope you are doing fine with your marking and media course. I am writing to you in response to your letter requesting info and my thoughts on foreign direct investment in e-commerce segment.

FDI is the bread and butter for new market and upcoming start ups. As In my country investor like to play safely and they are investing in some start ups which may or may not be rewarding after long period. Currently government stricken use of FDI in e-commerce affecting thousands of companies like Amazon, Flipkart to name a few.

Now-a-days people do love sales every once in a while due to festive season. Due to this change in rules government discourage investors all around globe to invest in e-commerce in my country. People are not happy as they will not find bumper sale offers in near future.

For me this news served as a blessing in disguise. Being a start up I can raise money up to 100 grand via FDI. As you are only friend I have in New Zealand I need your help to arrange some meeting with possible clients. I am planning to visit you in early June this year. I will message you the other details regarding start up on your Facebook account.

Feel free to contact me on my mobile no. for any other details.

Best Regards,
James Sutherland

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 112, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...an raise money up to 100 grand via FDI. As you are only friend I have in New Zeala...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, may, regarding, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 26.3917525773 159% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1104.0 937.175257732 118% => OK
No of words: 244.0 206.0 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52459016393 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37417859457 2.54303337028 93% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 127.690721649 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647540983607 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 341.1 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3930313292 44.8134815571 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.3333333333 76.5299724578 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5555555556 16.8248392259 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 4.34317383033 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184968661375 0.216113520407 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476753976674 0.0766984524023 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610558051764 0.0603063233224 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0820157863942 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795874356946 0.0580467560999 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 8.37731958763 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.34 8.71597938144 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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