You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided you would like to apply to do a course at one of the college in the city. Write to your friend explaining-What you would like to do-Tell him what type of work or studies you have been doing fo

Essay topics:

You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided you would like to apply to do a course at one of the college in the city. Write to your friend explaining
-What you would like to do
-Tell him what type of work or studies you have been doing for the past few years.
-Ask for assistance in contacting as appropriate institution.

Dear John,

It is been long time to see you. I am hoping that everything is fine. I have completed my graduation this year only. So, I have decided to do post graduation in computers from the college of your city. As I have got the information from many people that colleges are very good there and environment is also very convenient for the students.

As i have told you that I have cmpleted my graduation this year only. So, it is very good for me to continue my studies further. I have done graduation in computers. Before that, I have completed my senior secondary education in commerce. I was doing part time job as a supervisor in a grocery store during my graduation.

As i do not have much knoweldge about the colleges of your city. It would be very beneficial for me if you provide some contact numbersof colleges or you can visit some colleges to get information for me. This will help me alot in choosing a good college. Give my good wishes to your parents as I miss them alot.

Thanking you

Yours faithfully,

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...so very convenient for the students. As i have told you that I have cmpleted my...
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Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...dary education in commerce. I was doing part time job as a supervisor in a grocery store ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... grocery store during my graduation. As i do not have much knoweldge about the ...
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Line 7, column 4, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ocery store during my graduation. As i do not have much knoweldge about the co...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 850.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52127659574 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65942552774 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56914893617 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8610873777 44.8134815571 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 56.6666666667 76.5299724578 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.5333333333 16.8248392259 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 4.34317383033 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297573026091 0.216113520407 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105452556386 0.0766984524023 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084147853144 0.0603063233224 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206398433722 0.12726935374 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194963840522 0.0580467560999 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.1 8.37731958763 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.05 8.71597938144 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 8.62886597938 58% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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