you have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.you would say :-1. Correct the information in the article.2. Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct

Essay topics:

you have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.
you would say :-
1. Correct the information in the article.
2. Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information.
3. Suggest what the magazine should do about this information.

Dear editor,
I want to draw your attention on an error posted in an article about the canals in my town.

I belong to the town 'Tohana' famous for its canals all around the area. In the last week edition of your magazine revealed that there are five canals in the town but this is incorrect. My town is having seven canals separated from one huge canal.

I want you to correct this information as this is the main attraction for the visitors. People love to see how seven canals going in directions from one place. If,people read this incorrect information might have changed their mind not to visit.This could demolish my town's economy.

I would like to suggest you to correct this information in your next edition. So, people can remains in the faith as my town is a reputed tourist place.

your sincerely,
Harman

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...als going in directions from one place. If,people read this incorrect information ...
^^
Line 6, column 163, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , people
...s going in directions from one place. If,people read this incorrect information might h...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 246, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...ht have changed their mind not to visit.This could demolish my towns economy. I w...
^^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Your
... my town is a reputed tourist place. your sincerely, Harman
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 684.0 937.175257732 73% => OK
No of words: 146.0 206.0 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68493150685 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.47606760199 3.78020617076 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39886443392 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 127.690721649 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623287671233 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 211.5 290.88556701 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.0140704078 44.8134815571 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.4 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.1 4.34317383033 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276130200505 0.216113520407 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106900468858 0.0766984524023 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794125555061 0.0603063233224 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170342751364 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325862044492 0.0580467560999 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 8.37731958763 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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