You have just received a letter from an overseas university saying that your IELTS bandscore of 6 is too low for admission to any of its Master’s Courses ( you need 6.5)Write a letter to the admissions officer. In your letter• Introduce yourself.• E

To the admissions officer,

I am Chitra who recently applied to your university on 16th February 2018. I was little disappointed on receiving the admission letter today as it had mentioned that we need a minimum band score of 6.5 in IELTS whereas my current score is Band 6. As you may be aware, Band 6 was the minimum requirement for Masters in Business Administration in Economics and Finance in Harvard University till last year.

With regards to my academic performance, my average percentage in formal examinations are 8 which is equivalent to Grade A in all the universities across Europe. Hence, I am on-par with other students who are academically proficient. On the other hand, I request your suggestions on the other ways to obtain admission to your institution. Perhaps, I can score Band 6.5 if I re-attempt the IELTS examination. But admissions would be complete for this academic year by then.

I am even ready to take up any other entrance examinations that would validate my skills on communication, aptitude and logical abilities. Looking forward for your positive response as pursuing my post-graduation in your university is one of my dreams since childhood.

Yours sincerely,
Chitra

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e childhood. Yours sincerely, Chitra
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, may, then, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1020.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 198.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15151515152 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2015581351 2.54303337028 126% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631313131313 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2389432179 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7272727273 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 4.34317383033 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228948558021 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080817220015 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531472364325 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156645287737 0.12726935374 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597335829871 0.0580467560999 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 8.37731958763 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 8.71597938144 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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