You have recently attended a 90th birthday party of a close relative. It was successfully organised by hotel staff. Write a letter to the manager and say– Describe the event.– Talk about the facilities provided to guests, especially the elderly.– Me

Essay topics:

You have recently attended a 90th birthday party of a close relative. It was successfully organised by hotel staff. Write a letter to the manager and say

– Describe the event.
– Talk about the facilities provided to guests, especially the elderly.
– Mention a particular employee whose service was great.

Dear Mr. Morrison,

By way of introduction, my name is Mariam and I am writing to you with regards to the birthday party that was held at your hotel last Saturday. The event was organized for my grandmother Jennifer, who was celebrating her 90th anniversary.
First of all, I would like to thank you for the properly managed event. The guests were quite pleased with the foods and soft drinks. They also liked the dancing music and the sing-along contest that maintained the upbeat atmosphere during the whole period of the party.

It is worth mentioning that it was highly appreciated by our elderly guests that the hotel was well equipped and was suitable for senior attendees. In particular, some of the participants were pleased to find out that there was an option of having wheelchairs instead of regular chairs, and that they were able to easily move within the hotel premises in those.

I would also like to express special gratitude to one of your waiters, whose name is Jim for the high quality services provided. Jim was exceptionally responsive, would the guests have any question or request.

Sincerely,
Mariam

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 164, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...le for senior attendees. In particular, some of the participants were pleased to find out t...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, well, in particular, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.48453608247 187% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 950.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 191.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97382198953 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6695718484 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628272251309 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 286.2 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.3397644456 44.8134815571 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.555555556 76.5299724578 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 16.8248392259 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 4.34317383033 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15723109591 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569636601168 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511135810656 0.0603063233224 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923684325815 0.12726935374 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571928246706 0.0580467560999 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 8.37731958763 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 8.71597938144 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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