You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a familyfor six months and look after their six- year-old child.Write a letter to the parents. In your letter- Explain why you would like the job- give details of why you wo

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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family

for six months and look after their six- year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

- Explain why you would like the job

- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ

- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing with regard to the advertisement I read in the jobs section in Australian Digest. I am very interested in the position you are offering, and feel like I am quite suitable for the job.

I am currently looking for a short-term job in Australia to spend my free time while accompanying my family. I just moved to Australia from Canada with my husband, who was assigned to work on a one-year project with a local team here. With 10 years working experience in child care, I believe I am the right person you are looking for.

Before I entered the child care field, I studied youth development back in university, where I acquired all the valuable knowledge and theory regarding children growth. After that, I gained real-life experience as a teacher assistant where I spend most of my time working with children from 4 to 6 years. I was described as patient, dedicated and hard-working. I could easily get to know about children and make friends with them, which comes with my personality.

Outside of work, I would love to take some time exploring the city and visiting the museums. I know there are some conservation areas in Australia that is definitely worth going.

Thank you for your time reading my letter. If you need further details, please feel free to contact me via abc@email.com or 123456789.

I look forward to your response.

Yours faithfully,

Amanda Roberts

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... I am quite suitable for the job. I am currently looking for a short-term j...
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Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...free time while accompanying my family. I just moved to Australia from Canada wit...
^
Line 9, column 236, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ne-year project with a local team here. I had 10 years working experience in chil...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, regarding, so, while, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1144.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 236.0 206.0 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84745762712 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85763855377 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631355932203 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 342.9 290.88556701 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1980359367 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7142857143 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8571428571 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 4.34317383033 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146940847884 0.216113520407 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046985134297 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0297480774361 0.0603063233224 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0700505023868 0.12726935374 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315382613716 0.0580467560999 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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