Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Sheena Smith, living in your neighboring country New Zealand and a native to Auckland city. I came across an advertisement posted by you in The Sydney Weekly magazine, related to a vacancy in your family for a babysitter to your six month old baby.
I would like to position myself for the requirement posted by you. I am an Australian resident, and my age is 20. I have an invitation from the University of Sydney for graduation in Social Science. I have been a rank holder throughout my secondary education, and my Parents are working professional from health industry.
I live in a family of eight members where I am the eldest child, therefore I have experience in care giving and babysitting - both the roles; thanks to my little siblings. I consider myself fit for the role, please do consider my candidature.
The requirement posted by you is for six months only, during this time I will also get myself familiarized with Sydney, though It does not mean that I will be frequently away from my Job, leaving the baby. I will need to visit the University only 3-4 times regarding my admission and university hostel fees payment formalities.
I hope you would give me an opportunity to introduce myself, and explain further why having me on the job helps us both, most importantly the baby, who will get a sibling like person in me.
Looking forward to get positive response from you soon.
Yours Sincerely,
Sheena
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...bysitter to your six month old baby. I would like to position myself for the r...
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Line 5, column 68, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...self for the requirement posted by you. I am an Australian resident, and my age i...
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Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... Australian resident, and my age is 20. I have an invitation from the University ...
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Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...dney for graduation in Social Science. I have been a rank holder throughout my s...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... professional from health industry. I live in a family of eight members where...
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Line 7, column 173, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he roles; thanks to my little siblings. I consider myself fit for the role, pleas...
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Line 11, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o will get a sibling like person in me. Looking forward to get positive response...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to getting'.
Suggestion: to getting
...like person in me. Looking forward to get positive response from you soon. You...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, regarding, second, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.85567010309 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1214.0 937.175257732 130% => OK
No of words: 253.0 206.0 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79841897233 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80432161644 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 127.690721649 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624505928854 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 290.88556701 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.345712833 44.8134815571 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3846153846 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4615384615 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38461538462 4.34317383033 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329382700691 0.216113520407 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107876514536 0.0766984524023 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830025205333 0.0603063233224 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155902310959 0.12726935374 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592498419423 0.0580467560999 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 41.2886597938 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.