You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- Explain why you would like the job
- Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir,
I hope you will find this letter in the best of health and happiness. I read about your advertisement in yesterday’s Australia magazine to babysit your six-year-old child. Therefore, if you will approve my request through this letter, I would like to come and visit your place to take the babysitting job.
I work with a New Zeeland child’s healthcare department for the past half a decade. My company offered a trip to Australia to make a project on child’s healthcare. The duration would be six months of this trip. And, I liked the idea of my firm to study the practical knowledge of taking care of children. So, when I saw your advertisement in that magazine, I thought it would be a great opportunity to become a babysitter for six months.
Since I am experienced enough in handling the child’s nature and behavior, I think it would be the best thing to do by hiring me to babysit your kid. Besides, if you could please tell me your working time, I will prepare the weekly schedule for your kid.
After my baby-sit work, I would like to go and see the City and serene surroundings of your place. Plus, I would like to visit the beach on Sundays as I love all kinds of water sports like surfing, scuba diving, and others.
I hope you will consider me for the baby-sit work.
Yours sincerely,
Shwatank Bhasin

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: YOUR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'you're' or 'you are'?
Suggestion: you're; you are
...d. Besides, if you could please tell me your working time, I will prepare the weekly...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, so, therefore, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1102.0 937.175257732 118% => OK
No of words: 239.0 206.0 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61087866109 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71158116183 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581589958159 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 334.8 290.88556701 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5073095894 44.8134815571 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.7142857143 76.5299724578 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0714285714 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 4.34317383033 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313584238883 0.216113520407 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104645280246 0.0766984524023 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555884230785 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166793285858 0.12726935374 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628628401769 0.0580467560999 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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