You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter explain why you want to work in the company s head office for si

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter,
explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months
say how your work could be done while you are away
ask for his/her help in arranging it

Dear Mr. Satish,

I am writing to express my interest in working in the Germany office for the next half year to acquire new skills.

For the reason that the training for the course I wish to do is only available in the head office, it would be beneficial for me and my current project as the new requirements from our Trac360 customers need an AI advanced knowledge to be implemented. Also, of particular relevance is the fact that I have an intermediate level certification in this area, so it would be more advantageous for my personal growth as well as for the project.

While I would be away, the new member of our team will be doing front-end development as from the past two months I have been giving training to him in my area of work.

However, to process my application I need to discuss this situation with Department Head. I would appreciate it if you could explain to him the necessity of my relocation for six months in Germany, and arrange my meeting with him.

I hope you will give this matter your immediate attention. I look forward to hearing from you.

Thank you in advance.

Yours Sincerely,
Jaskaran Kaur

Votes
Average: 6.7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 60, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e this matter your immediate attention. I look forward to hearing from you. Th...
^
Line 16, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ance. Yours Sincerely, Jaskaran Kaur
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, so, well, while, as for, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 949.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 203.0 206.0 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67487684729 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.733382083 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605911330049 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.1863375228 44.8134815571 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9 76.5299724578 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 16.8248392259 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 4.34317383033 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260492103771 0.216113520407 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100872606728 0.0766984524023 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482241513148 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124515855578 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477954829763 0.0580467560999 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 8.62886597938 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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