You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job.
Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter,
introduce yourself
explain what experience and special skills you have
explain why you are interested in the job
Dear Sir,
My name is Jane Doe and I am studying Arts in the University of Melbourne. I am writing you this letter in reference to the advertisement for a job vacancy in the city museum shop. I am very interested in this job and would like to submit my resume for your reference.
As an arts student I have fair knowledge of the history. I have also visited the city museum during school trips and prepared projects and presentation on the sculptures and paintings displayed. In addition, I am an avid painter myself and can explain the details to the visitors and I believe these skills definitely gives me an edge over the other candidates.
Since I aspire to become an artist one day and have a keen desire to learn and explore more,the City Meusem would be the best place to work and learn further where I can pursue and enjoy my work to the fullest. I also believe that city museum is the best museum in the town in terms of maintainance,variety of art and sculpture and the guides.
I would be delighted to have a oppurtunity to render my services.Hope to receive a positive response.
Your's Sincerely,
Jane Doe
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...submit my resume for your reference. As an arts student I have fair knowledge o...
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Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
... my resume for your reference. As an arts student I have fair knowledge of the hi...
^^^^
Line 7, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... a keen desire to learn and explore more,the City Meusem would be the best place to ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 151, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to further'
Suggestion: to further
...uld be the best place to work and learn further where I can pursue and enjoy my work to...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , variety
...eum in the town in terms of maintainance,variety of art and sculpture and the guides. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 30, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...guides. I would be delighted to have a oppurtunity to render my services.Hope ...
^
Line 9, column 66, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hope
...ave a oppurtunity to render my services.Hope to receive a positive response. Your...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 5.05154639175 257% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 934.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 203.0 206.0 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60098522167 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86192058491 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556650246305 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 307.8 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.47781691 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 16.8248392259 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1 4.34317383033 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300062948016 0.216113520407 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107568880613 0.0766984524023 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940998954995 0.0603063233224 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145694795783 0.12726935374 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789164469696 0.0580467560999 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.