You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job.Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter,introduce yourselfexplain what experience an

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job.

Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter,

introduce yourself
explain what experience and special skills you have
explain why you are interested in the job

Dear Sir,

My name is Peter Smith, a graduate student studying in St. Paul College. I am writing with regards to the job advertisement posted in Times of India on 7th July. I would like to seek an opportunity to work in the city museum shop during my summer holidays.

I have previously worked with D-mart in sales department for one year and assisted customer queries and complaints. My main specialization is into sales and customer service. I assure you to give my best services at all times.

I would request you to give me an opportunity to work in the city museum shop as it will help me gain more experience and help me in my career. Moreover, I also have interest in History and working for a museum shop will give me motivation to perform better in my tasks. At the same time, I can gain more knowledge and information about the history.

Thanking you.

Yours Faithfully,
Saiyed Ali Husain

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...seum shop during my summer holidays. I have previously worked with D-mart in s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 762.0 937.175257732 81% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7037037037 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69481033535 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 127.690721649 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62962962963 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 237.6 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3491456085 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.2 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.8 4.34317383033 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258301950045 0.216113520407 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861733671312 0.0766984524023 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800401055322 0.0603063233224 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152579077786 0.12726935374 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519000458544 0.0580467560999 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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