You Have Seen An Advertisement For Someone To Stay With A Family To Take Care Of Their Child Explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Essay topics:

You Have Seen An Advertisement For Someone To Stay With A Family To Take Care Of Their Child
– Explain why you would like the job
– give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
– say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear sir or madam,
I'm writing in regards to your advertisement about looking after your child. I need this job because I have to find a part-time job to make a living here.

I am keen on toddlers and love to spend my time with them. I also teach the piano and guitar as I am a student of music at Melbourne University. So, I can take care of your child properly. I had a similar experience of working in a kindergarten a few years ago, and my English is good enough.

My schedule is quite flexible, but I have to go to the university at weekends. I presume you need a babysitter just for the early morning till afternoon, so I have plenty of free time for myself in the evenings. Sometimes I play the guitar in public and earn money on occasions, but I am going to find a restaurant to play there.
if you need more info, please do not hesitate.
your faithfully

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 2, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
Dear sir or madam, Im writing in regards to your advertisemen...
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Line 2, column 13, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
Dear sir or madam, Im writing in regards to your advertisement about looking after ...
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Line 4, column 61, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rs and love to spend my time with them. I also teach the piano and guitar as I am...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...g to find a restaurant to play there. if you need more info, please do not hesit...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Your
...ed more info, please do not hesitate. your faithfully
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 707.0 937.175257732 75% => OK
No of words: 166.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.25903614458 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65476808478 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638554216867 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 233.1 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0951545728 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.7 76.5299724578 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.3 4.34317383033 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189889200412 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638359387434 0.0766984524023 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549861011829 0.0603063233224 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108160318874 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228033896695 0.0580467560999 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 8.37731958763 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.13 8.71597938144 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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