You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting He she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking yo

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You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you.
Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room and explain your reasons.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to complaint about the disturbance caused by my room-mate during the study hours. I am hoping that you would allot me a new single room.

First of all, the reason that impelled me to change my accommodation is my room mate's attitude. he never leave a chance to annoy me. Since he is surrounded by his friends when I came back from work. he usually wake up late in the morning so, sleep late at night. It creates an awful situation in which I couldn't catch up my sleep.

Moreover, he always invite his friends late at night and have some parties in the room. I couldn't perform well in studies and at work due to cumbersome conditions in the room. Apart from that, he borrowed some of my clothes without asking me and never returns them. he sometimes wouldn't bother to tell me that he took my items, untill I would inquire.

As a solution, I hope that now you can understand my position at this point and would allow me a new room. I not only want a new room, but also I would prefer a single room for the next term. Keeping my preferences in view, I would contact you after a week to interrogate about the availability.
Thanks for giving the matter your attention and I look forward to hearing back from you.

Yours faithfully,
XYZ.

Votes
Average: 8.2 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ccommodation is my room mates attitude. he never leave a chance to annoy me. Since...
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Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'leaves'.
Suggestion: leaves
...ion is my room mates attitude. he never leave a chance to annoy me. Since he is surro...
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Line 5, column 134, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e. he never leave a chance to annoy me. Since he is surrounded by his friends when I ...
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Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...his friends when I came back from work. he usually wake up late in the morning so,...
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Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wakes'.
Suggestion: wakes
... when I came back from work. he usually wake up late in the morning so, sleep late a...
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Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...t creates an awful situation in which I couldnt catch up my sleep. Moreover, he alw...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in which I couldnt catch up my sleep. Moreover, he always invite his friends l...
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Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'invites'.
Suggestion: invites
...ch up my sleep. Moreover, he always invite his friends late at night and have some...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ht and have some parties in the room. I couldnt perform well in studies and at work due...
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Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: He
...thout asking me and never returns them. he sometimes wouldnt bother to tell me tha...
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Line 7, column 270, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
...ut asking me and never returns them. he sometimes wouldnt bother to tell me that he took my items...
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Line 7, column 280, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...me and never returns them. he sometimes wouldnt bother to tell me that he took my items...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, look, moreover, so, well, apart from, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 32.9175257732 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1046.0 937.175257732 112% => OK
No of words: 235.0 206.0 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45106382979 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49031078471 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608510638298 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.0707777969 44.8134815571 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.375 76.5299724578 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6875 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 4.34317383033 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240811812813 0.216113520407 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815272187183 0.0766984524023 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416273297219 0.0603063233224 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133305787135 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377403037806 0.0580467560999 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 8.37731958763 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 70.7449484536 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.94 8.71597938144 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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