You live in a room in college which you share with another student However there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college In your letter describe the situatio

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.
However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it
very difficult to work.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter
describe the situation
explain your problems and why it is difficult to work
say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in reference to the accommodation that i rent one month ago. Although my room is very clean and I have all the facilities such as heater and private bathroom, I am facing an issue with my roommate which is studying music. In fact, she is inviting her colleagues almost every day to practice together.

The problem is that I need a calm environment in order to be able to complete my thesis in genetic disorders that should be presented by the end of the coming month. Actually, am not able to concentrate since there are a lot of noise especially that each one of her friends bring his guitar and his drama's.

As I already mentioned earlier, I am happy with my room especially that it is near my university however i am not able to focus therefore I would kindly ask you for a new room with the same facilities but without any roommate even though it will be smaller I will adapt my self.

Looking forward to hear from you soon .
Yours Faithfully,

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is inviting her colleagues almost every day to practice together. The problem...
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Line 5, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... complete my thesis in genetic disorders that should be presented by the end of t...
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Line 7, column 32, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...amas. As I already mentioned earlier, I am happy with my room especially that ...
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Line 7, column 107, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...y that it is near my university however i am not able to focus therefore I would ...
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Line 9, column 17, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
... will adapt my self. Looking forward to hear from you soon . Yours Faithfully,
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Line 9, column 38, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... Looking forward to hear from you soon . Yours Faithfully,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, look, so, therefore, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 814.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 182.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47252747253 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60411038638 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.648351648352 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.138398851 44.8134815571 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.285714286 76.5299724578 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 16.8248392259 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 4.34317383033 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136949336294 0.216113520407 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553269254658 0.0766984524023 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439636979589 0.0603063233224 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0819797126305 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419775668056 0.0580467560999 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 8.37731958763 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 70.7449484536 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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