The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries.Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

Essay topics:

The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries.

Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

Lately we have noticed that the number of murders has deadly increased in youth people and in many societies specially the civilized ones. In fact this problem is a result of lack of parental supervision and easily access to technology and can be solved by increasing awareness in family and at school.

In one hand, we all agree that the direct supervision of the mother and father plays a crucial role in child behavior. Those days parents spent almost all their day at work and when they are back they prefer rather to rest than to discuss with their kids about their problems .Consequently, this will lead to a distance between children and their parents and child can commit a crime easily. In addition, the rapid evolution of technology and it is easy availability and accessibility is also playing a role since by surfing internet youngsters can be get a wrong information and watch inappropriate videos

On the other hand, there are many possible solutions that can be followed in order to minimize those numbers. Firstly, government should conduct a regular awareness for families on how to deal with children and treat them as a friends, so the child will become closer to his family. Secondly the awareness should include only schools since teenagers will pass more than their half day at school where they will meet other students and together they can prepare for any murder. So a closer supervision of teachers and regular meeting with the parents will surely prevent a lot issues.

To sum up, although the number of crimes is increasing a lot those days , tracking the reasons and put accordingly the possible solutions will tackle the problem.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, consequently, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, in addition, in fact, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92553191489 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61624449011 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581560283688 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.8338489802 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.333333333 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3333333333 20.7667163134 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4444444444 7.06120827912 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132147576328 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560370238517 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492139673955 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972524733376 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514275425339 0.056905535591 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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