You local newspaper published an advertisement asking people to help with environmental projects in your area.Write a letter to the project manager to offer your help.In your letter:describe a local environmental issue that affects youexplain what you wou

Essay topics:

You local newspaper published an advertisement asking people to help with environmental projects in your area.

Write a letter to the project manager to offer your help.

In your letter:

describe a local environmental issue that affects you

explain what you would like to do to help

suggest how the problem could be avoided in the future

You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in relation to an advertisement your paper recently published asking for local volunteers to provide environmental assistance.

I would like to raise your awareness of an environmental issue that has been plaguing my local area. I live near Brighton beach which in the last year has become a very popular spot with tourists and visitors. The beach used to be pristine and isolated; however, due to its growing popularity, it has become quite polluted with rubbish. Also, people have begun camping on the beach and this has resulted in an increase of rubbish being left behind.

To help clean up the beach after visitors, I would be more than happy to arrange a group of local volunteers for a beach-cleaning event. We would pick up rubbish and also install rubbish bins at regular intervals along the beach.

To help save the integrity of our beach and avoid further pollution, I suggest that the council makes this a camp-free zone.

Yours faithfully,

Analisa Bellmont

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e that has been plaguing my local area. I live near Brighton beach which in the ...
^
Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...been plaguing my local area. I live near Brighton beach which in the last year ha...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 851.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 168.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06547619048 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77530998657 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.672619047619 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 260.1 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.947874212 44.8134815571 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5555555556 76.5299724578 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88888888889 4.34317383033 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194827990489 0.216113520407 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085365729505 0.0766984524023 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086559198037 0.0603063233224 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116704753747 0.12726935374 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0850408143194 0.0580467560999 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 8.37731958763 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 8.71597938144 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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