You need to borrow some money to pay for something you need for your work or studies. Write a letter to your bank to ask for a loan. In your letterintroduce yourself and ask for a loansay why you need the moneyexplain how you plan to pay the money back

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am Gunjan Pratap a saving account holder in your bank with account number 15772397. I am writing this letter to inquire about how can I apply for a loan from the bank.

I am going to pursue a MBA course from St. Gallen University, therefore I would require a sum of 20000$ from your bank. I have all the required document at my disposal like admit letter, previous bank history and scholarship papers. Half of my fess has been paid in scholarship but for the other half a loan is required to complete my studies. My father will become guarantor if required.

While pursuing my studies, I will be working part-time and would try to save as much as I can so that some initial amount can be paid at starting. Along with that I have planned to pay into EMI's as soon as I get job until then I will pay interest amount.

I hope you will understand the gravity of the situation and would grant me the loan amount that is required.

Yours faithfully,
Gunjan Pratap

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...an I apply for a loan from the bank. I am going to pursue a MBA course from St...
^
Line 5, column 22, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... from the bank. I am going to pursue a MBA course from St. Gallen University, ...
^
Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$20000'.
Suggestion: $20000
...ity, therefore I would require a sum of 20000$ from your bank. I have all the required...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...require a sum of 20000$ from your bank. I have all the required document at my di...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 814.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 181.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49723756906 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4696317994 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613259668508 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8275798682 44.8134815571 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 4.34317383033 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187817041693 0.216113520407 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699985491095 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449348773356 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102351130373 0.12726935374 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347699302066 0.0580467560999 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 70.7449484536 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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