You need to take leave from your work of over one-month for personal reasons. Write a letter to your boss.In your letterExplain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need.Explain how you will keep up to date while you are awaySuggest how yo

Dear Mr. Black

This is John, i am writing to you about the possibility of taking 12 days off work in order to complete my thesis and final exams for my Master's degree in Finance from the University of Manchester. I am hoping that you would grant me a leave from 17th to 29 October.

I have almost finished my thesis, which i must submit to my teacher by November 4th. I need some time to completely finish it and to prepare for the upcoming exams. Hence i am asking for your permission to take time off work.

I can assure you that i will check my emails daily, perhaps reply to some of them and be available for emergency calls from the office. Once i complete my exams and get back to the office i would endeavour to come to the office earlier than usual and work Sundays in order to catch up with everything i have missed.

I have already talked with Sam, and he is ready to share some of the responsibilities during my absence. I understand that my temporary absence could be an inconvenience to you and the rest of the team, but i really need to take the leave to complete my master degree qualification.

I am looking forward to hearing from you and expecting your kind cooperation.

Yours sincerely.
Arnold Stalone

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
Dear Mr. Black This is John, i am writing to you about the possibility...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...I have almost finished my thesis, which i must submit to my teacher by November 4...
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Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t submit to my teacher by November 4th. I need some time to completely finish it ...
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Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... and to prepare for the upcoming exams. Hence i am asking for your permission to take...
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Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...o prepare for the upcoming exams. Hence i am asking for your permission to take t...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ime off work. I can assure you that i will check my emails daily, perhaps rep...
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Line 7, column 142, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...r emergency calls from the office. Once i complete my exams and get back to the o...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ete my exams and get back to the office i would endeavour to come to the office e...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...lked with Sam, and he is ready to share some of the responsibilities during my absence. I u...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lete my master degree qualification. I am looking forward to hearing from you ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 26.3917525773 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1020.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 227.0 206.0 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49339207048 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62349504132 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577092511013 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 324.9 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.1914118883 44.8134815571 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 76.5299724578 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 16.8248392259 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 4.34317383033 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256695757382 0.216113520407 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996965763534 0.0766984524023 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704138925128 0.0603063233224 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144830379629 0.12726935374 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406751714767 0.0580467560999 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.