You noticed a room at your company office that can be used as a relaxation room. Write a letter to your manager and ask to use the room for this purpose.
In your letter,
• explain why you are suggesting this
• which room it is
• what changes in the room will need to be done
You should write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ............,
Dear Mr. Wesley,
I am writing this letter with regards to propose some idea of converting the room next to meeting room into recreational room.
This idea came into my mind when I visited H& HN company for meeting. During their company tour, they shown me games room where many people spend their leisure time in playing chess or billiards and many more indoor games. The fact that HR told me behind this concept is for employee satisfaction and to increase overall performance. I spoke with some of the staff in our organization and they welcomed this idea.
As the room which is next to meeting room is unused from past few months. Before getting a cupboard which is kept at the reception, the room was previously used for storage of files and other stationeries. So, we can convert that room for recreational activities.
In my view, we have sofas and spare chairs in our storage so we would need billiard table, chess board and other games including some fitness equipments. We would also take view of other employees for decorating the room to make the place lively.
I hope you would consider this idea and will be waiting for positive response.
Yours sincerely,
Tim Frank
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is idea came into my mind when I visited H& HN company for meeting. During their ...
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Line 5, column 51, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (HN) must be used with a third-person verb: 'companies'.
Suggestion: companies
...came into my mind when I visited H& HN company for meeting. During their company tour,...
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Line 5, column 104, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'showed'?
Suggestion: showed
...eeting. During their company tour, they shown me games room where many people spend t...
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Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...rease overall performance. I spoke with some of the staff in our organization and they welc...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ization and they welcomed this idea. As the room which is next to meeting room ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 997.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 206.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83980582524 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48777290858 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645631067961 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1585097889 44.8134815571 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0833333333 76.5299724578 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 4.34317383033 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357186198567 0.216113520407 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125238056591 0.0766984524023 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854752996232 0.0603063233224 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191270281518 0.12726935374 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113811586899 0.0580467560999 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 8.37731958763 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 8.71597938144 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.