You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter :
1) Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college.
2) Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her.
3) Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her.
Dear Jack,
I've received your letter last night after coming back from my office and I'd say you must throw a party as you've got the chance at Westwood College. Anyway, congratulations on your brilliant success!
In your letter, you've expressed a dilemma on going to the college for the masters degree, rather you've shown a little interest in getting a job. Well, if you ask me, I'd suggest postponing your study plan and start looking for a job more seriously. Let me explain it more clearly.
First of all, you had a plan to do your masters degree on Cyber Security, but unfortunately, you have got Robotics which you don't like. Why should you spend your next two years for a boring subject that you don't like? Rather, you should try to get a job that matches your interests. This will match with your passion and you can get both experience and some financial back-up. Maybe one or two years later, you can enroll for diploma courses on your dream subjects. I'll simply recommend you to stick to www.indeed.com where you can have a lot of job opening for IT firms.
Anyway, I must get off now. I'll call you next weekend during my free time and will talk more on these issues. Till then, take care.
Bye for now.
Sam.
Comments
Dear Concern,
Dear Concern,
For your kind observations, all the contractions have been written properly in the text and unfortunately, the e-grader is not being able to read them at all. I have tried twice and failed to justify why this is happening. I am seeking your kind attention to it.
I look forward to resolving it at your end as soon as possible.
Yours faithfully,
itsshuvro
I have read your essay and
I have read your essay and will give it 5.5 out of 9. The main issue is that it is not exactly right on the topic. Let me explain.
If I am going to write this essay, I will give this structure:
paragraph 1: introduction.
paragraph 2: Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. reason 1....reason 2....
paragraph 3: Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her. reason 1....reason 2....
paragraph 4: Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her. my suggesion, then reason 1....reason 2....
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while your issues:
issue 1: paragraph 1 and paragraph 2 together as introduction are too much for an introduction. It doesn't need to make a story. The introduction should be something simple like this:
I received a letter from you and asked for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. I think you should get a job first.
issues 2: you used one paragraph (the third paragraph) for 1) 2) 3) together:
1) Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college.
2) Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her.
3) Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her.
you are good at 1) Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college.,
but where is the content for 2) Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her. ?
for 3) Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her. it is out of topic. we will need to suggest him/her types of job first , like IT job. and then explain why IT job is good for him/her. while you suggested him/her where to find this job.
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hope this can help you.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
Dear Jack, Ive received your letter last night after c...
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Line 3, column 74, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
...ht after coming back from my office and Id say you must throw a party as youve got...
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Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you've
...ce and Id say you must throw a party as youve got the chance at Westwood College. Any...
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Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you've
...r brilliant success! In your letter, youve expressed a dilemma on going to the col...
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Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: ON_GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
... your letter, youve expressed a dilemma on going to the college for the masters degree, ...
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Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you've
... college for the masters degree, rather youve shown a little interest in getting a jo...
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Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
... in getting a job. Well, if you ask me, Id suggest postponing your study plan and ...
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Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nately, you have got Robotics which you dont like. Why should you spend your next tw...
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Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...two years for a boring subject that you dont like? Rather, you should try to get a j...
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Line 7, column 467, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...diploma courses on your dream subjects. Ill simply recommend you to stick to www.in...
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Line 7, column 538, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of jobs'.
Suggestion: a lot of jobs
...ck to www.indeed.com where you can have a lot of job opening for IT firms. Anyway, I must...
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Line 9, column 29, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...T firms. Anyway, I must get off now. Ill call you next weekend during my free ti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.48453608247 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1014.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 222.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56756756757 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34725749031 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.653153153153 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 295.2 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0845564482 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.4285714286 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8571428571 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 4.34317383033 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320329287537 0.216113520407 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105385930119 0.0766984524023 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731284205772 0.0603063233224 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169724220062 0.12726935374 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071419492529 0.0580467560999 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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