You saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event:1. Explain why you are interested in helping2. give details suitable past experience3. suggest ways you might help with the event

Essay topics:

You saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event:

1. Explain why you are interested in helping
2. give details suitable past experience
3. suggest ways you might help with the event

Dear Ms. Kathy,

I hope this letter finds you in the best of spirit. I am writing to express my interest in your upcoming charity event.

Growing up in a foster home, I know how difficult and depressing life is without parents. Thus, I see to it that I can reach out and help these abandoned children during my spare time.

For the past 5 years, I have been a volunteer event host at the Golden House of Children located in Wright Avenue, East City. I have a compilation of programs with various activities and games suitable for children. I can present them to you for your perusal at your most convenient time.

Furthermore, my cousin, whom I grew up together in the foster home, owns a restaurant and she also offers food and party services for these kind of events at a discounted price. You can contact me through phone or email at joyce12345@gmail.com or 713-564-1654.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Joyce Smith

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 135, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...also offers food and party services for these kind of events at a discounted price. You ca...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, so, thus, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 809.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84431137725 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84475886804 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.694610778443 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 232.2 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2736989728 44.8134815571 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.5454545455 76.5299724578 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1818181818 16.8248392259 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 4.34317383033 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215001146841 0.216113520407 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738340915273 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458172414325 0.0603063233224 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119149416833 0.12726935374 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600986060962 0.0580467560999 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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