You saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event:1. Explain why you are interested in helping2. give details suitable past experience3. suggest ways you might help with the event

Essay topics:

You saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event:

1. Explain why you are interested in helping

2. give details suitable past experience

3. suggest ways you might help with the event

Dear sir,

Writing this letter to show my interest in charity events and also willing to become a helping hand of the organization.

I am a person with innocent heart and never see people in poor conditions. I always try to help someone in any kind. these kinds of tasks always give me peace which, can never find anywhere. my leader always motivate his disciples to do jobs for mankind, which can help them to know their being.

I have already managed these kinds of events twice. so, I have expeirnced about that particular works like how to manage team, because I am capable to find out the calibre of others so, that we can utilize their physical or mental power to make the event successful.

As I already said that I arranged two programe before this event so, if you guys will give me a chance to manage financial affairs then i will put my 100% to prove my capability, because I know very well that from where we can purchase stuff at cheapest rate with good quality.

Hope you will give me a chance to show amy potential.

I shall be thankful to you

Yours sincerely

Ram

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 928.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 199.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66331658291 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35901684623 2.54303337028 93% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 127.690721649 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643216080402 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 286.2 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0930089955 44.8134815571 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4 4.34317383033 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175268599035 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695179650023 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394952419525 0.0603063233224 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10365311683 0.12726935374 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358588213274 0.0580467560999 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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