You travelled by a long distance bus recently and your suitcase was damaged.Write a letter to the bus company. In your letterinform the bus company of when and to where you travelleddescribe your suitcase and what happened to itexplain why the company sho

Essay topics:

You travelled by a long distance bus recently and your suitcase was damaged.
Write a letter to the bus company. In your letter

inform the bus company of when and to where you travelled
describe your suitcase and what happened to it
explain why the company should pay for a new suitcase
Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am regular passenger of your bus service but I would like to express my dissatisfaction on a recent visit.
Recently, I reserved a seat of your bus when I was travelling from Hyderabad to Mumbai as it is fastest and convenient mode of transport. However, when fleet reached at Mumbai in morning, I found some part of suitcase was damaged due to mishandling.
It was an American tourister blue colour bag and when I gave it to porter to keep my suitcase in luggage compartment, he thrown the suitcase in a haphazard way. The wheels of the suitcase was damaged and handle was broken.
I informed to the staff about the bag damage but he didn’t responded in a proper way. I am attaching pictures of the damaged suitcase and request you to pay for the damages as it has happened due to your negligence service.
I will be waiting for your response.
Yours faithfully,
Saurabh Dumbre

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 142, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a haphazard way" with adverb for "haphazard"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...age compartment, he thrown the suitcase in a haphazard way. The wheels of the suitcase was damaged...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 75, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...bag damage but he didn't responded in a proper way. I am attaching pictures of the damaged...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ppened due to your negligence service. I will be waiting for your response. You...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 754.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65432098765 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85881785117 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 127.690721649 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604938271605 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 236.7 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0246844339 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7777777778 76.5299724578 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.77777777778 4.34317383033 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30093833755 0.216113520407 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116747197488 0.0766984524023 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554429739509 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144769739241 0.12726935374 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364005889929 0.0580467560999 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 8.37731958763 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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