You want to appear for an interview to an another city by train The train departed late from the station and you could not reach in time Write a letter to the railway officer of your city In your letter When you traveled and why the train departed late Wh

Essay topics:

You want to appear for an interview to an another city by train. The train departed late from the station and you could not reach in time.

Write a letter to the railway officer of your city. In your letter.

When you traveled and why the train departed late.

What happened as a result.

How you feel about the problem.

Dear Sir or Madam,

This letter is a formal complaint with regards to explicit discontent towards the Railway Department for the train delay at the one of the local stations in Pune Junction.

As a starting point, I had traveled on 12th October, 2019 from Pune to Mumbai on a journey for three hours to appear in the final round of an interview. Unfortunately, there was a small conflict among the staff and the management at the time of a departure. In addition, in a span of few minutes the staff went on strike and threatened to halt the services for the day. Ultimately, the station was jam-packed and it took almost four hours to resolve the matter. Nonetheless, the entire journey costed me delay of seven hours and I could not make at the interview at the stipulated time.

Apparently, I was one of the two shortlisted candidates who made till the final round of the interview. To my surprise, the other candidate was selected for the job offer and despite making the Human Resources understand the given situation I was through due to the train delay, I had to return empty hand. Not only this, that I lost the job profile in a renowned company, however, my name was also registered in their records under the defaulter history.

I am completely disgruntled and agonized as the train delay has ruined my career and I had lost the opportunity to work for one of the most listed companies in the world. I feel all those who were involved in the strike must be penalized so that they understand their responsibilities and value time. I am enclosing a copy of the letter to the Railway Ministry and along with this, the entire scenario will be published on the social media site for the public awareness.

I hope this letter will awaken the staff and the management to serve the community in better way.

Yours faithfully,

Mansi Singh

Votes
Average: 8.4 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 45, Rule ID: COMMA_MONTH_DATE[1]
Message: The comma is probably incorrect: 'October 2019'.
Suggestion: October 2019
... starting point, I had traveled on 12th October, 2019 from Pune to Mumbai on a journey for th...
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Line 17, column 302, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... their responsibilities and value time. I am enclosing a copy of the letter to th...
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Line 21, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...dia site for the public awareness. I hope this letter will awaken the staff ...
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Line 27, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ay. Yours faithfully, Mansi Singh
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, however, nonetheless, so, i feel, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 26.3917525773 178% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 937.175257732 166% => OK
No of words: 327.0 206.0 159% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75229357798 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 3.78020617076 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70468507991 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 127.690721649 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553516819572 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 481.5 290.88556701 166% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.3600758175 44.8134815571 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 76.5299724578 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 16.8248392259 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 4.34317383033 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173961611066 0.216113520407 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053198137569 0.0766984524023 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043890040299 0.0603063233224 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.090806809683 0.12726935374 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508500923049 0.0580467560999 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 8.37731958763 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 41.2886597938 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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