You want to sell your television. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you.Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain:•Why you are selling the television.•Describe the television.•Suggest a date when your friend can come

Essay topics:

You want to sell your television. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain:
• Why you are selling the television.
• Describe the television.
• Suggest a date when your friend can come and see it.

Dear Vipul,

Hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter in regards to, I got your message about interested to buy my old television.
As you have seen television many times when you visited my home.The company name is Sony and it is 21 inchs television , there is no usages mark on it. The main purpose to change the TV is that I want to buy a smart TV according to my family need. Furthermore, in my current television there is some lack of technologies such as no HDMI and USB port. Additionally, it is especially for my 3 years old daughter, she is fond of cartoons; likewise, she can watch the rimes in that with cartoon's characters. Moreover, she can see many small clips related to alphabets and it will help her to learn new things as well.

Thus I will suggest you to come at my home on Sunday 15 December at 8 pm , before take any decision that will abet you to look it closely and then take the right decision. We can also spend a good time and take dinner together after long time.Hope to hear you soon.

With Love,
Soniya

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 51, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...re doing well. I am writing this letter in regards to, I got your message about interested to...
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Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ut interested to buy my old television. As you have seen television many times whe...
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Line 4, column 64, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ion many times when you visited my home.The company name is Sony and it is 21 inch...
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Line 4, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...visited my home.The company name is Sony and it is 21 inchs television , there is...
^^
Line 4, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e is Sony and it is 21 inchs television , there is no usages mark on it. The main...
^^
Line 4, column 122, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no usages'?
Suggestion: there are no usages
...s Sony and it is 21 inchs television , there is no usages mark on it. The main purpose to change ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...elp her to learn new things as well. Thus I will suggest you to come at my home o...
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Line 6, column 73, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...at my home on Sunday 15 December at 8 pm , before take any decision that will abet...
^^
Line 6, column 244, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hope
...nd take dinner together after long time.Hope to hear you soon. With Love, Soniya...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, likewise, look, moreover, so, then, thus, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 856.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 197.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34517766497 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47919552359 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.675126903553 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7729177571 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 4.34317383033 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197331664005 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640445825692 0.0766984524023 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605891201059 0.0603063233224 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149248755694 0.12726935374 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752603533653 0.0580467560999 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.95 8.71597938144 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.