You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your lettersays who you aregive details about the incidentsuggest how the supermarket could prevent si

Essay topics:

You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.

Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter

says who you are

give details about the incident

suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents.

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter in consequence of undesired event happened to me at Nescol super market last Sunday. Unfortunately, there was an accident which led to my serious wrist injury.

I would like you to know, that I am your regular customer since 2012. I work as a supervisor in Nestle company near by your market and I often shop at this specific market on weekends. So last Sunday, while, I was shopping. I observed a huge sale on several distinguished items, which led to tremendous amount of customers and in the narrow alley of food section some guys were pushing others to get to food items first, Thus, they dropped one of the entire shelf which severely injured few customers there and un-luckily my wrist got fractured as well.

So, I would like to request for appropriate shelf management to reduce the risk. Moreover, first aid kit is a must in case of such unpleasant event.

I hope, you will respond to this letter in your required actions to improve safety, that is of much essence, in your super market.

Truly yours,
Irfan

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
... work as a supervisor in Nestle company near by your market and I often shop at this sp...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 883.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72192513369 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56541849849 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.668449197861 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 274.5 290.88556701 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.082641283 44.8134815571 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 4.34317383033 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0851080458429 0.216113520407 39% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0325116005513 0.0766984524023 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419963058904 0.0603063233224 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0557335143724 0.12726935374 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406997580057 0.0580467560999 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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