You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your lettersays who you aregive details about the incidentsuggest how the supermarket could prevent si

Essay topics:

You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.
Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter
says who you are
give details about the incident
suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents.

Dear Ms/Mr,
my name is jack HUANG. I am living in Hurstville for 5 years. I am writing to you regarding my recent bad experience in your supermarket on 1th July.

I was enjoying the shopping night in your supermarket, preparing my family's food and grocery for next week. Usually I will use a trolley to carry all the stuffs what I purchase. As you know, weekly shopping has a huge amount items in the shopping list. Unfortuntley, the trolleys was ran out at that monment, so I have to pick one of the basket to continoue my shopping. Because the basket looks too weak to carry, I merely buy some of the necessities to check out. Suddenly, the basket was broken and the milk with the glass bottle was fallen donw on the ground, and my leg was slightly be cutted by a pices of the glass.

I strongly suggested that the management of the supermarket should be have a fully check the quality of the basket and keep a regular clean and check policy to prevent the similar accidents again for any customers in your supermaret. I felt fruastrated by this minor incident in your palce. I hope the managment should have a formol feedback to the public.

Your faithful
jack

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Ms/Mr, my name is jack HUANG. I am living in Hu...
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Line 2, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rience in your supermarket on 1th July. I was enjoying the shopping night in you...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e in your supermarket on 1th July. I was enjoying the shopping night in your...
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Line 4, column 285, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'run'.
Suggestion: run
...ng list. Unfortuntley, the trolleys was ran out at that monment, so I have to pick ...
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Line 4, column 429, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...t looks too weak to carry, I merely buy some of the necessities to check out. Suddenly, the...
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Line 4, column 589, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
... on the ground, and my leg was slightly be cutted by a pices of the glass. I s...
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Line 6, column 71, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had'?
Suggestion: had
...management of the supermarket should be have a fully check the quality of the basket...
^^^^
Line 6, column 292, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d by this minor incident in your palce. I hope the managment should have a formol...
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Line 8, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eedback to the public. Your faithful jack
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, regarding, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 964.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 213.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52582159624 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6043773141 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605633802817 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 290.7 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6464700268 44.8134815571 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.1538461538 76.5299724578 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3846153846 16.8248392259 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23076923077 4.34317383033 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162233313829 0.216113520407 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521822138833 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652847873448 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116813216797 0.12726935374 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378724662251 0.0580467560999 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 8.37731958763 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 8.71597938144 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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