Many museums charge for admission while others are free.
Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, there are more museums to charge the admission for the visitor. Some people think admission may cause some disadvantages. In my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantage.
Admittedly, museums charge of admission might restrict certain people to come. People from poor family or having a financial burden would not consider to visit a museum which is going to charge. Also, to charge fee might jeopardise tax payer's benefit. Part of the tax has been allocated to museums every financial year for the daily operation. The local citizens may feel frustrated since they have to pay extra money to visit the museums.
Nevertheless, the above argument is one-sided, since it fails to consider the long-term benefits that would entail. For one thing, tickets income enable to afford more employees getting a job in museums. New staffs can provide specific service to particular groups. For instance, museums can hire the retired professor to be a historical guide for those elder people groups which enjoy to listen old stories. In addition, the extra income from admission could offer an opportunity to organise the cultural exchange events with other museums or local communities. It allows to access the ground people, spreading more history informations to different ranges of visitors.
For another, the admission helps to maintain a better quality of museums. As we know, every stuff was kept in the museums has high cultural value worth a huge money. It cost most of the budget to keep them as the original. For example, one famous picture has to stored within certain weather condition, with proper temperature and humidity, which require high stander indoor environment.
To sum up, charging fee to the visitor might upset several groups of people, but it can provide a better quality service and create a premium museum to the visitors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider visiting'.
Suggestion: consider visiting
... or having a financial burden would not consider to visit a museum which is going to charge. Also...
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Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nsider the long-term benefits that would entail. For one thing, tickets income en...
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Line 5, column 382, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy listening'.
Suggestion: enjoy listening
...ide for those elder people groups which enjoy to listen old stories. In addition, the extra inc...
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Line 5, column 516, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tunity to organise the cultural exchange events with other museums or local commu...
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Line 5, column 576, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'accessing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: accessing
...museums or local communities. It allows to access the ground people, spreading more histo...
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Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'huge money'.
Suggestion: huge money
...e museums has high cultural value worth a huge money. It cost most of the budget to keep the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, nevertheless, so, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, for one thing, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21262458472 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65411703943 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598006644518 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1270457539 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5789473684 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8421052632 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35990042466 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103390588932 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104016369369 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204504882978 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106231132554 0.056905535591 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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