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You work for a children’s home which needs volunteers to help at weekends .write to the local newspaper. In your letterRequest that they publicise the vacancies Include details of what is required of the applicantsExplain the ways in which both voluntee

Essay topics: You work for a children’s home which needs volunteers to help at weekends .write to the local newspaper. In your letter

Request that they publicise the vacancies

Include details of what is required of the applicants

Explain the ways in which both volunteers and children might benefit.

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I am one of the workers in” Green garden “children’s home,. serving assistance to children during weekdays. Some of our collaborators finished their courses at college and leaving the Green garden. Therefore there are vacancies for weekends and we are in urgent need for taking care of children in these days .I would like to ask you to rank this request in the headline of your newspaper.

Volunteers are not required to be highly educated ,however they should have one the following skills :sports like basketball, able to play one of the music instrument like violin or learnt a foreign language in intermediate level.

The most efficient person would be some body who is in their twenties due to high compatibility with young children. Besides it is essential to have a letter from laboratory to make sure candidates are not addict or alcohol abusers. Finlay a simple interview with the authorizes to proof psychologically health.

Children at this home are at the age of 8-10 and so enthusiasm to experience new skills, there will be a mutual benefits if volunteers are learning new skills and share their experiences with children and promote the abilities for both sides.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
... Green garden 'children's home,. serving assistance to children during w...
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Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Serving
...een garden 'children's home,. serving assistance to children during weekdays....
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...t college and leaving the Green garden. Therefore there are vacancies for weekends and we...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...or taking care of children in these days .I would like to ask you to rank this req...
^^
Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... taking care of children in these days .I would like to ask you to rank this requ...
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Line 9, column 50, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s are not required to be highly educated ,however they should have one the followi...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gn language in intermediate level. The most efficient person would be some ...
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Line 13, column 38, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'somebody'?
Suggestion: somebody
... The most efficient person would be some body who is in their twenties due to high co...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 120, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Besides,
...high compatibility with young children. Besides it is essential to have a letter from l...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 282, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'proofing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'authorize' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: proofing
... a simple interview with the authorizes to proof psychologically health. Children at t...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, so, therefore, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 32.9175257732 43% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1018.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 197.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16751269036 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02660691261 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659898477157 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 316.8 290.88556701 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.5606723208 44.8134815571 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.111111111 76.5299724578 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 16.8248392259 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 4.34317383033 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204067618638 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691748249442 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673131440627 0.0603063233224 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105801636402 0.12726935374 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798472156181 0.0580467560999 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 8.37731958763 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 70.7449484536 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 8.71597938144 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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