You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment In your letter Describe the problem with the equipment Explain how this problem is affecting your wo

Essay topics:

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter:

Describe the problem with the equipment
Explain how this problem is affecting your work
Say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear Sir,
I am writing to report a problem with a piece of hardware which I bought from your store. Ever since I installed it, the computer is restarting for no reason. I do work from home, and I have only one system so this put me in trouble.
Two days ago, I found that the physical memory resource in the windows resource manager of my laptop was hitting 100 % and the fan was spinning abruptly. After a couple of hours of troubleshooting, I concluded that the issue is with the memory card which I bought from your company a week ago. After the installation of this malfunctioning memory, Microsoft office and other software on the laptop has stopped working.
I removed the card and the system started working again without any issue, and when I again reinstated the memory card and the problem restarted. Hence, I would like to replace this memory as soon as possible especially since it is under warranty and its box is still in good condition.
Thank you for your time and support.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
RK

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'windows'' or 'window's'?
Suggestion: windows'; window's
...hat the physical memory resource in the windows resource manager of my laptop was hitti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, look, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 871.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6329787234 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6278351856 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.63829787234 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1061751317 44.8134815571 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1818181818 76.5299724578 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0909090909 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23310011762 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890962564304 0.0766984524023 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768768428855 0.0603063233224 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123932214712 0.12726935374 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720653257405 0.0580467560999 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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