individual greed and selfishness has been the basis of the modern society. Some people think that we must return to the older and more traditional values of respect for the family and the local community in order to create a better world to live in. To what extent do you agree or
disagree?
It is a fact that the modern consumeristic society is behind the materialistic thing which satisfies their greed and becomes more selfish. A people that values it privilege more than principles will soon lose both. Therefore, I agree with the statement that we should revert to the golden times where we respect our elders and neighbourhood so that we can have a happier today and happier tomorrow.
Today, we live in an era of technology where the Earth has shrunk into a global village. Everyone is connected to everybody through online like email, internet and telephone, here the warmth of relationship has taken a back seat. In the consumeristic world, people run behind the money to satisfy their needs. Hence, they become more workaholic to earn more and have no time to spare with the family and friends. People become more selfish, isolated and indifferent. To add to it, the youngsters who are at ease with the new technologies think that the elderly are good for nothing, that is why they are not respected.
On the other hand, life in the past was slow and straightforward. The joint family system was commonly seen, where everyone see each other face-to-face, and they love and respect each other. Even the elderly were taken care well with great respect and, people valued their advice. Divorces were very rare, and marriages were considered to be sacred. Moreover, community get-togethers were more often organized, and people know the farthest neighbours. Now, the situation is worse as people not even know who is living next door.
To conclude, living in the modern toxic world, we are slowly being poisoned to death. Therefore, it is clear that the traditional value-based society is a better world to live in. So we have to return conventional values to create a modern world, which has both wealth and prosperity and also respect for the family and the local community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'privileges'?
Suggestion: privileges
...s more selfish. A people that values it privilege more than principles will soon lose bot...
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Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...neighbours. Now, the situation is worse as people not even know who is living next...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95611285266 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70601378203 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570532915361 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8095097377 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8333333333 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7222222222 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326276664246 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916176015887 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726162497945 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198283433795 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100967528123 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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